Idea number 2 feedback

On 13/11/2015  - Police man murder of himself

Mia- Love that he's walking through and no one says anything to him, makes you think why is no one saying anything to him. When he says we need to solve a murder 'our murder' she finds exciting.

Amr - Love the idea, the only thing to consider is because he's walking through it for about a minute and a half and the action will only start happening in the last 30 seconds it would be hard to keep it interesting throughout the entire sequence. Think about how it would remain interesting, and adding some intensity.

Tash - Likes how the audience would be wondering where he is going, it would come  as a hit that he is the ghost.

Mike - Understands about the length and keeping it interesting, you want to make the opening sequence as interesting as possible and if you have 1 minute and 40 seconds of something quite uninteresting and then a cool reveal its not ideally enough. Premise for the film is fantastic, very original, However the worry is that the genre is blurred a little bit, Its a cool line 'our murder'. Delivered in the wrong way and brings everything down, why does he have to be told that he is going to be killed, the ghost element is what is making it science fiction. Maybe as a suggestion have the guy at a crime scene to film the flashing lights and ambience, he walks in and everyones looking nervous and he asks who is the victim and everyone tells him 'you' and he looks down and the guy dead is him, so like nothing is given to us. Feels to much like an opening to a tv programme. Could make it better by bringing a slow build up to a line that hooks us in. Got the right ingredients but just need to mix it up a little bit. Make it so we are engaged as soon as it starts and don't believe the murder our murde line in a cheesy manner. Very promising though and loves the originality. Likes the fact that I've tied it in with the prospect of him overtly trying to avoid his destiny he goes about creating it.

Feedback on Thriller Idea 1

On 13/11/2015 - Psychopath killing in Artist style.

eloise: Liked the change on the perception of what was happening, liked the spotlight idea more than the shed idea, more interesting.

Evelyn: Agrees it would be more effective it being in the studio and would be more dramatic and make it more thriller esque.

Ollie: Might be quite hard to get the length of two minutes.

Nanci: Loved the idea, individual and creative, don't expect that its going to end how it does, conveys the genre.

Mike: Could get around the length, Incredibly violent opening, borders on horror, soundtrack is the wrong way to go, sound effects, muffled screaming and slowly coming through with the sound that adds tension and would make it more of a thriller. Love the idea, love the simplicity of it, spotlighted black room as opposed to the shed idea, the shed idea makes it feel more amateur and the studio would be much better. Already different ways to think of it you could shoot with a perspex glass, you could do a pop of the victim to make it look like the brush strokes are happening to you even though they would be happening to the victim. Overall film is slightly cliche but opening sequence is excellent, little bit of tweaking on making it more suspense than horror.

Media Thriller Idea 4

Whole film - The film is about The girl being reported missing shortly after this scene and we see a big memorial for her outside the school. we then follow the school throughout the movie and it is one of those stereotypical murder ‘who did it’ thriller films. We grow close to a couple of characters until one of the english teachers best students go missing under nearly the same circumstances as Katie. We find out in the end it wasn't actually her brother who throughout we are led to believe it is because he is emotionally unstable hearing of his sisters death we all think because the guilt has literally consumed him.But actually it is the lovable english teacher who everyone grows to love in the film.

Opening Scene - A lovable teenage girl called Katie is practising a monologue after school probably about 7/8 o clock, no one else is at school but her and the lighting guy and maybe her teacher, It’s set in the theatre so its a big empty space with just one spotlight on her then the lighting guy says he has to lock up and she's fine with it and then he ‘leaves’ and then then lights turn off and then turn on and everything is distorted for example the stool she was stood next to is over turned and there are pieces of paper from the book scattered everywhere also they’re torn and the girl herself is not there anymore and she has mysteriously disappeared.

Media Thriller Idea 3

Whole film - This film is all based around A guy called Sam who is Jane’s brother who is an ex cop who was fired after accusing the wrong guy and trying to shoot a man who he suspected was the serial killer who killed his sister. He is then applying for a job, we can immediately tell he has a heart of gold. He finally finds a job that will take him with a criminal record in a mask shop called “Maury’s Masks” He is an artist so thinks this is a perfect job for him. Slowly throughout the film he is given lots of clues using his cop mind frame to determine that Maury is the masked serial killer. In the end we see a scene between Sam and Maury which is a high action fight scene and ends with ‘plot twist’ sam being killed. We then watch Maury walk away and know he has got away with it.

Opening scene - We start with a girls phone ringing and zoom in on it on her bedside table. Lots of missed calls from her best friend Jane. She picks it up as she runs out from the shower singing along to the song playing from her laptop. She tells Jane she will be outside in 5 minutes which is an obvious lie and Jane says she’ll wait for her outside. She then continues to get ready  and turns her phone on silent as she turns he music up to the loudest it can go dancing around stupidly. While this is going on we slowly zoom in on her phone which has suddenly got about 20 missed calls and a lot of texts starting with a simple “Im outside babes, hurry!” escalating to more urgency in her texts which shows obviously something is wrong, texts like “help”, “someone is here” and “he is going to kill me” all popping up on her screen. Jane of course has turned it on silent so she has noticed any of this until we pan up to jane and she is ready she slowly walks toward he phone which she checks and then drops in fear. She runs downstairs to check for her friend with phone in hand and she is nowhere to be seen but there is a pool of blood on her driveway. She then looks down on her phone and there is a text saying ‘run’ from Janes account which had been sent about 5 minutes before, which is obviously someone else before she can even have a chance and we pan down to the floor as we see her drop to the ground obviously having been shot.

Thriller Idea 2 -

Opening Sequence - Long shots of a a normal looking man with a hat on and we follow him from behind pov, he walks through an office sort of seeming to be ignored. We see him walk through a busy foyer seamlessly with out being asked any questions, hopefully making the audience trust the guy we are being shown. We then see him knock on a door and hear a voice say come in, all this time still not seeing the face of the man who had knocked on the door, we come into a normal cop in his office, the man enters, and we see the man at the desk looking at the man who has just entered, he then asks the cop to solve a murder. When the cop asks who was murdered in a laughing sort of tone, the guy who has walked in says'We were,' and we are then shown a mid shot of the guy lowering his collar & taking off his hat to reveal that the client is the cop is himself, as a sort of ghost from his own future, trying to solve his own murder before it happens. 

Whole Film- The film would follow the cop trying to solve his own murder being driven by himself/ his ghost throughout. the ghost would make the cop question his trust with every person near or not so near and dear to him. Eventually driving him to near insanity and ending up with him trusting no one. It ends with him killing himself, which the ghost has been trying to warn him not to do all along but by him being so uptight he sort of drives himself to kill himself.

Thriller Idea 1

THRILLER IDEA  1 - 

Opening Sequence - Intense looking man, psychopathic looking. Vivaldi’s 4 seasons/serenade 13 in g major by mozart playing loudly in the background, man looks as though he is painting a large canvas, intense motions like he is passionately painting. extreme close ups of the face to show intensity, sweat dripping down his forehead, wearing a boiler suit with splashes of JUST red paint on it, close ups of paint palate of just watery red paint (at this point the audience feels as though the worst thing he’s doing is painting with blood). At this point you don’t see the canvas or the instrument he is using to paint with. The man steps back from his ‘painting’ and reveals that what should be a paint brush is actually a scalpel and the camera pans round and his ‘canvas’ is actually a human body, tied with its hands above its head, still alive, gagged and bound with lots of blood coming from the stomach. Final shot is an extreme close up of the man smiling maniacally and laughing softly to himself obviously pleased with what he has created. 

(The song in the background totally contrasts the actions of what is happening, the calm nature of the man suggests psychopathic tendencies, goes against some general thriller conventions, but conforms to others like the introduction of an protagonist without giving too much away)

Whole Film - The man we are shown is a hitman. He is payed by mobsters mostly to do there dirty work but also gets a sick pleasure out of all his killings as he feels like he needs to do them in a perfect way, maybe he has obsessive compulsive disorder possibly. He clearly enjoys his job and feels no sense of remorse for lost life. We are following his killings throughout until finally his bosses kick him out of the mob or they get arrested and he is out of a job and a way to channel his psychopathic tendencies. 

Conventions of a thriller using tagxuedo.