On 13/11/2015 - Police man murder of himself
Mia- Love that he's walking through and no one says anything to him, makes you think why is no one saying anything to him. When he says we need to solve a murder 'our murder' she finds exciting.
Amr - Love the idea, the only thing to consider is because he's walking through it for about a minute and a half and the action will only start happening in the last 30 seconds it would be hard to keep it interesting throughout the entire sequence. Think about how it would remain interesting, and adding some intensity.
Tash - Likes how the audience would be wondering where he is going, it would come as a hit that he is the ghost.
Mike - Understands about the length and keeping it interesting, you want to make the opening sequence as interesting as possible and if you have 1 minute and 40 seconds of something quite uninteresting and then a cool reveal its not ideally enough. Premise for the film is fantastic, very original, However the worry is that the genre is blurred a little bit, Its a cool line 'our murder'. Delivered in the wrong way and brings everything down, why does he have to be told that he is going to be killed, the ghost element is what is making it science fiction. Maybe as a suggestion have the guy at a crime scene to film the flashing lights and ambience, he walks in and everyones looking nervous and he asks who is the victim and everyone tells him 'you' and he looks down and the guy dead is him, so like nothing is given to us. Feels to much like an opening to a tv programme. Could make it better by bringing a slow build up to a line that hooks us in. Got the right ingredients but just need to mix it up a little bit. Make it so we are engaged as soon as it starts and don't believe the murder our murde line in a cheesy manner. Very promising though and loves the originality. Likes the fact that I've tied it in with the prospect of him overtly trying to avoid his destiny he goes about creating it.
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