Feedback – Blank Canvas Pitch

This is the feedback we got regarding our pitch on Friday, the 4th of December, including the rehearsal shoot.

• Nice camera angles.
• Difficult to show a cut up body, however what if the painting was drawn in blood from the body on a canvas – people wouldn't expect that. Using the body to create the painting/sculpture – using the vicitim as material than rather cutting it up.
•  Torture.
• Using a guy is a better idea (as the victim) as it isn't stereotypical.
• Location: Depends – if you want a studio, you can use the art room instead of just using the studio.

  ~ Don't do the hallway thing, keep it in one location.

Our response to the feedback:

• The new idea is that the victim is dead and that the psychopath is drawing in the victim's blood.
• Discarded the hallway idea.
• Everything else is still the same.

Scene Outline:

• Slowly introduced to our male psycho killer
  • Show shots of his eyes, his hands, etc. to create tension

• Slow build up of shots that increase in importance
  • As we go along we see the parts of the paintbrush, blood palette, etc.
• We then see the body
  • The body is no longer suspended from the wall or a slab
    • Body is now seated on a chair or lying on the floor, bloody and dying/dead.
  • We see a scalpel lying somewhere, alongside knives and other weapons.
• In the end, the killer is shown manically smiling
  • Obviously happy, shaking, sweat dripping down his head, and the canvas full of blood is shown.